Section Reviewer Page Date Original Comment Last Reply Author Last Reply Date Remediated Last Reply Text                                      
Section Section 1 SYSTEM OVERVIEW Klinger, Stephanie 6 5/22/2025 13:20 Required: Please review this document and add first references with acronyms as per the FX Program Style and Writing Guide, Section 2.5, where Appendix C provides common examples. Mike Collins 6/2/2025 10:39 1 I think I got them all
Section Section 2 ROLES AND RESPONSIBILITIES McDaniel, Dan 9 5/21/2025 12:46 Style:  Fonts on this page should match. Michelle Newbold 6/9/2025 10:57 1 6/9 Remediated with Dan. 
Section Section 2 ROLES AND RESPONSIBILITIES McDaniel, Dan 9 5/21/2025 12:52 Required:  “Intended” is not an appropriate adjective for a role (repeated twice more below). Michelle Newbold 6/9/2025 11:00 1 6/9 Remediated with Dan. 
Section Section 2 ROLES AND RESPONSIBILITIES McDaniel, Dan 9 5/21/2025 12:48 Clarification:  By “allows full access,” does this mean can read a folder, view a file, make changes?  Clerical options such as file editing should not be permitted to Admins.  Please be precise so the limits of the role are known. Michelle Newbold 6/9/2025 11:01 1 6/9 Remediated with Dan. 
Section Section 3 STANDARD OPERATING PROCEDURES French, Shaun 10 5/26/2025 23:57 Deliverable Reviewers self-classify their comments (Add type, listed below, as first word in comment, in both comment tracker and Word documents):
Critical: The resolution of these comments, including clarifications, is essential and must be completed to approve deliverable. Discussion with the vendor is likely required to resolve. Required: (Documentation/corrections/formats) The resolution of these comments, including clarifications, is important and necessary to approve the deliverable. Conditional approval to move forward - project tasks dependent upon the approval on this artifact can commence. This artifact will be eligible for payment upon final approval. Suggestion: The resolution of these comments is not necessary for the approval of the deliverable.
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Mike Collins 6/2/2025 10:40 0 N/A
Section Section 3 STANDARD OPERATING PROCEDURES French, Shaun 10 5/26/2025 23:58 Required: We need to know what reports are available, not what can be done.  Also the previous sentence mentions a variety of tools are readily available. Please list and describe them and their usages. Mike Collins 5/29/2025 15:52 1 I narrowed it down to the one tool. Power BI is tricky, please let me know how to reword the “SLM requirements” piece (that lists all the reports which are available). Or I could just name some of the  reports? - Thanks
Section Section 3 STANDARD OPERATING PROCEDURES French, Shaun 12 5/26/2025 23:59 Required: How are these dashboards being made available to the Agency? Mike Collins 5/29/2025 15:57 1 Clarified user vs admin notification methods.
Section Section 3 STANDARD OPERATING PROCEDURES French, Shaun 12 5/26/2025 23:59 Required: How are these being made available to the Agency? Mike Collins 6/2/2025 10:40 1 Discussed ways power users and admins can access data system usage
Section Section 3 STANDARD OPERATING PROCEDURES French, Shaun 12 5/27/2025 Required: Where is the frequency and detail of this described? Mike Collins 6/2/2025 10:41 1 Replaced automated backups with the more descriptive “continuous incremental backups”
Section Section 3 STANDARD OPERATING PROCEDURES French, Shaun 13 5/27/2025 0:02 Required: This describes recovery from an outage, but how do you deal with other forms of disaster?   Network outages affecting a specific data center (can you force switch region?), cyberattack, randomware, etc. Mike Collins 6/2/2025 10:53 1 I added some more information, specifically more info about how the failovers work and a summary of data breach prevention
Section Section 4 SECURITY AND DATA PROCEDURES French, Shaun 14 5/27/2025 0:03 Required: This is not accurate. Mike Collins 5/29/2025 16:09 1 Updated, trimmed it down a bit to avoid saying anything it shouldn’t.
Section Section 4 SECURITY AND DATA PROCEDURES French, Shaun 14 5/27/2025 0:06 Required:  This whole section reads like marketing material from DataVerse.  Please rewrite for the appropriate audience. Mike Collins 5/29/2025 16:15 1 Trimmed the fat and only put in things specifically used by UOC
Section Section 4 SECURITY AND DATA PROCEDURES French, Shaun 15 5/27/2025 0:04 Required: How do you anticipate the Agency will be using DataVerse to create comprehensive business solutions? Mike Collins 5/29/2025 16:15 0 Good question. Deleted.
Section Section 4 SECURITY AND DATA PROCEDURES French, Shaun 15 5/27/2025 0:05 Required: How will this be made available to the Agency? Mike Collins 5/29/2025 16:17 1 I deleted it, pretty much a repeat of the earlier monitoring tools description.
Count 14
Remediated 12 85.71%
Not Remediated 2 14.29%